Hi Kye! I think it's the first time I have the opportunity to comment on one of your submissions, what a shame, I would have liked to have been able to see its evolution!

The first thing I want to tell you is that I love your drawings! You are a great artist, I am amazed at the great capacity for expression that you have been able to give to each of your characters.

I like the background music. I wonder if you plan to transform the small texts into new drawings, or if you are going to record dialogue on top of them. Sometimes, it is a bit difficult for me to read and at the same time look at your drawings, I have to choose between doing one thing or the other. I think it would be a good idea to leave each image a little longer or turn the text into narration or dialogue.

Congratulations on finishing the Xperiential program!

Hello, thank you for all you compliments and critiques Julieta! I also want to say that I am planning on updating and developing my story so it can be more like the one I have imagined. If you would like to see the progress, I will be updating here and on my socials. I hope to deliver the rest of act one by the end of September (if time allows it).

Of course! You can reach me on Discord if you need any feedback :)

Hello Kye. Your story is very sweet, and the drawings are well defined. I love the way you set up the boards; for example, when Otto looks out the window and in seconds he closes his eyes and opens them, and when the man suddenly appears next to him. How about show the character with their names on top. I would like to know more about this lovely story. Great job!

Your art is beautiful. I love that a bear is a part of a human family. He's so darn cute.

I struggled to understand who was who, and who was speaking. I finally put it together by the end of the video, though. Great choice of music!

Now I need to know what happened to the parents! (Were they parents?)

Hi Kye,

Congratulations on delivering the first part of your story. Big fan of your drawings, it is really clear to follow! The only thing I would suggest is to spend some more time for the frames that have more text because I had to rush sometimes to read it. I am really curious how the story further develops. Good luck! 💪

I love this intro! It's very clean and the style of the characters is cute and memorable, they remind me of illustrated characters from the 1960s-70s. The only note that jumped out at me was the speed of some of the boards, some go a little too fast to read or even take in what their action is, so maybe making it last a couple moments longer will go a long way, otherwise great work! If this was only the intro I can only imagine what cool things you've got in store.