Another story that caught my attention! I love how this story turned out, And the progress you went through to make it! I love the battle scene!

What a nice improvement from your previous submissions. Compared to your older submissions, I can easily tell you took the feedback seriously and made some necessary changes. I noticed that instead of Jazimaine starting the fight, the Wizard decides to challenge her to a fight. That was a great change because now it shows that Jasmine is willing to be ambitious and fight for what she believes in, instead of simply just resorting to violence because she feels like it. Though I think it's somewhat abrupt that Burn challenges her to a duel. The fight scene has a lot going on, but it's really well described and makes it easy for me to understand. The visuals also help me. I think it's ironic and fitting to have Jasmine get back up to defeat Burn because mother nature encouraged her. I'm still not sure if mother nature is just the wind or a physical being, but it's fitting that she was who convinced Jasmine to keep fighting.

Overall, your story was really entertaining, and it felt unique and different/ Though there were a couple of parts that I felt weren't clear, I understood the most important story elements. To rate your story, I'd give it a 90/100. Well done! Thanks for joining the program!

-Cyruss Bell

I like the story but some of the narration feels repetitive. Your drawings went well with the story. I think you did a good job with editing, choosing the music. The story was creative and interesting. Nice job.

Interesting story, it's very action-packed and intense. I love how Mother Nature decided to protect Jasmine because she saw that Jasmine wanted to fight back against Burn.

Your story was super cool and the music in the second act was SO EPIC and INTENSE! I liked how the flower that saved Jasmine was actually a jasmine flower, that was pretty creative!

Just wanted to congratulate you on getting your final project done! I enjoyed the music, narration, pictures to go with the story, all of it. Good job and I enjoyed watching this progress into the final story.