Hii!! A very timely theme for our current world, I enjoyed this a lot! Both characters you're rooting for as you're learning something from one and are relating to the other one who is learning something themselves. I think the ending can be created to be even stronger where we see more of what he does after that conversation with Luna. Showing instead of telling I think is what I would suggest if you wish to progress this further outside the program. Otherwise, this is something to be proud of, great job Cristalle:)

Good job! I liked that your story pertained to a very crucial and timely topic. I also enjoyed the points you made regarding humans' relationship with the planet and the importance of not viewing the world as an endless resource. Your drawings were also strong. Congrats!

Hi Cristalle! I think I haven't had the opportunity to follow your work throughout the program, but I'm happy to be able to evaluate it now!

I want to congratulate you for the large number of drawings you have done, it must have taken you a lot of time, well done! I think your story is very special since you convey a message that I have not seen in any other. I like that from the sadness of a person you have managed to get a positive message to make us all reflect on our planet.

Thank you so much for sharing your work with us. Congratulations on finishing the Xperiential program!

Hey Cristalle! Nice job on your story! It must have taken a lot of work and you should be super proud.

One thing I would say is that I think it’s missing a climax. Right now it feels like a educational video about climate change. (Which is great to know). But I think we can go even deeper. Maybe the boy could ask if there is a version of his wife in the other universe? If there is, then maybe doing all the green things on his planet could win her affection or something? Idk just some ideas.

Wonderful job!

Hi Kristen! Thanks for the feedback and suggestions. My vision for the climax was when Leo meets Luna and he goes from his lonely life to finding connection with this mysterious person, but also by following Luna’s advice, he’s able to turn his life around from waving to people on the street to being outside with his coworkers. I appreciate your thoughts and can think of ways to make the backstory of his partner deeper in the future story :)