Hey Ivanfilm!

I had to double check to make sure it was you! I’m amazed you changed your whole story and managed to come out with this brilliant piece! I love the simplicity of it and how you were able to get through all 3 acts seamlessly. You did a great job! I love that Iman learned for himself that he doesn’t need recognition to keep learning. I was hoping for the mom to give him some praise and it was a nice twist to your story! I love this moral. Congrats on all your hard work!

Thanks Daisy! I'm glad you "get" the story and the theme. It's quite challenging to distill it to its essential so it doesn't run long. I have thought of not putting the mom storyline as others have suggested, but I was hoping for that "twist" which you totally caught :D

strong stuff!

Thanks!

really good story and really relatable along the way! you did amazing work!

Thank you for relating it, which is one of the hardest thing to do

Good story moral that tied it all together. I like that he didn't get the prize but discovered the real achievement in himself. The drawings with less detail still carried a lot of emotion is that impressed me. This was definatly a pg7 Greek tragedy, very nice.

Actually, he got the "prize," but it falls short of his expectation which is challenging to convey on screen. Yout got the theme which is the most important thing. I need to read this pg 7 Greek tragedy!

I really like your clean and concise art style! The story shows clear character growth and progresses nicely. It would be nice to see in greater detail how exactly Iman struggles with his mother's hurtful remarks and how the friction polishes him into a better person over time. Overall, I enjoyed your reel and I love to see this fully flushed out!

That's a really good point, I'd love to expand a little bit more of his struggles and I wish I have more time developing it. thanks for bringing that up!

This story had great character growth through out. I really enjoyed how relatable the character was and his success at the end. as an audience member I found myself really rooting for him. I liked how the different art styles complimented the story and also showed the emotion of the story. Awesome job.

I really liked the drawings, the composition, and the perspective. I really liked the storytelling and how relevant the story is to others. What a great story in general, I really liked it!

Thank you for your message, means a lot!

It seemed like a nice, quick story that follows a character's change over time. The shift from "class clown" to "third in the class" is an interesting one to see - any shift from one extreme to another is always interesting to watch. Your beats were all clear and precise; each one seemed to flow neatly into the next.

After reviewing the story, here are some notes I have:
- Detailing the struggle that Iman is going through when trying to study (like going through long sleepless nights, or failing tests) might've made your character more personable. Showing the audience the challenges Iman goes through will work to make the audience root for him, making him achieve his goal that much more satisfying to watch.
- This might just be more of a personal preference, but seeing as how the relationship between him and his mother was like a side-story, I would've liked to see his mother congratulate him since it would complete that side-story. Her not believing him makes it feel like the story is somewhat incomplete.

Outside of that, I really enjoyed watching your film; (assuming multiple people worked on this) I especially liked seeing the different art styles that resulted from this project being group-based.

Thank you for your suggestion! It'll be a good addition.

I liked how you modified the story to not be so aggressive with the protagonist.
I really like your line.

It misses the impact I'm looking for, but I think it's probably better this way. Thank you for the input

I love the character development that places centered around such a fundamental aspect of life which is learning. I think that the lesson of learning to improve at the skill for yourself as opposed to for others is huge and definitely essential. Great job, I love this!

Thank you for noticing it. The hardest job is to not make it OBVIOUS!

Hi! Wow this is a big change! The last submission I reviewed from you was about ghosts, so I see that you have completely changed your story! It must have been very difficult to do that so close to the end of the program, so congratulations on having managed to develop a new story in such a small amount of time.

I like this new story, I think we can empathize very well with your character, since we've all been through school and occasionally there are bad influences that we have to learn to avoid. I also like that your character changes his personality so drastically, and that he learns that beyond seeking the acceptance of others for what he does, the most important thing is to feel proud of oneself and learn along the way.

Good job! Congratulations on finishing the Xperiential program :)

Thank you for all the previous inputs. Though the last idea was fun to develop, I wasn't really connecting w the story emotionally. Thank you for the kind words and I'm glad you "get" it as I had the idea for the ending was such a last-minute addition. Great job on yours too!