I was worried in the beginning as it all seemed random, but it all came together quite nicely. Good swerve at the end with the Prey being the Hero. I appreciated the fact that I didn't know where the story was heading for the most part. This could be a good short.

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Very nice story with connecting the prey to be the hero at the end, calms down the food chain mentality which I enjoyed. I think the narration helps move the story to the pictures along, though I also think it can be strong enough with more storyboard drawings and no narration if you are looking into it again in the future. Regardless this was great! Congratulations on finishing the program, this was well done!!

Thank you for the feedback! Congratulations to you, too.

I love your story! It's simple and sweet, with great message about friendship.

Overall, your drawings are easy to understand, and it helps communicate the story quite well. However, I think adding some more drawings can enhance the drawings further. Also, in addition to the symbols you use to communicate the character's emotions, I think adjusting their facial expressions can help a lot as well!. Another main comment I have on the drawings would be the way you chose to frame them. While most of them are great and goes well with the narration, I think you could benefit more from shots like close ups to show the character's emotions (like when Maria and Julie is scared in the water) to really show their desperation.

For me, my favorite part about your work is definitely the character development and lesson learned in this story! They are very well thought out and the story flows very nicely. Also, and you did an amazing job narrating and adding sound effects as well :)

Thank you so much for the thoughtful comment! I appreciate your feedback.

Great use of sound effects! Good job. Fun story too

I love how character driven this story is! The change from using her wings for hunting birds to trying to save her sister is SO sweet <3 The lesson learned in this story is perfect to help people understand that you should always remain open minded and expect surprises from the universe! Very nice job!

Thank you so much!! :)

Hi Caroline,
I really like your story structure and moral of the story. I like animal stories, it makes us empathetic i think. I like your lines but if the animals have more clear facial expressions it would be more clear and engaging.
I know it is hard to finish our stories so you did the hard job. Thank you for letting us to see your story :) good job, congratulations.

Thank you so much! I appreciate the suggestion. Congratulations to you as well!

Hi Caroline! Congratulations on finishing the Xperiential program!

I really like that the bird which Maria tried to attack finally helps her. I guess that here you’re trying to say something like that we shouldn’t judge a person without knowing them, which is a wonderful message.
I think that the story would be more engaging for your audience if you added some drawings. Even though it’s clear since you use narration, some extra visuals would help a lot. I would also recommend you to lower a little bit the music volume, since sometimes it’s a little bit hard to listen to what you’re saying.

Good job!

Thank you for the comment and feedback! I really appreciate it. Congrats to you, too.

I liked that the main character sacrifices what he wants for what he needs.