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Hellenah (1 like)
I really like the moral and the story too great job
Aug 27, 2022, 3:24 PM
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Victoria (1 like, 1 helpful)
While there was a quite bit of filler, the idea and story is a great one and certainly something I’d watch if it ever made it to the big screen!
Aug 21, 2022, 5:33 PM
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Ness
Thank you so much by the way! I don't think I expressed my gratitude fully before! You are very kind! Thank you!
Aug 23, 2022, 2:30 AM
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Ness
Thank you! But, what do you mean there was filler? I am always looking to improve my submission! So would you please name parts you thought were filler?
Aug 21, 2022, 5:36 PM
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Nicolas (1 like, 1 helpful)
There are good morals to your story and good art. The pacing and storytelling could use a little more depth. The exaggeration of the voices fit the story well! Good job.
Aug 20, 2022, 4:48 PM
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Ness
Could you explain how the pacing and storytelling need more depth? I am looking to improve my story and would love your feedback!
Aug 20, 2022, 5:50 PM
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Ness
Thank you for your feedback! I completely agree about the pacing and storytelling, I just did not have the time needed to properly tell the story! I tried to make it shorter than it is, and I understand what you are saying! This is a complex story, and was hard to tell! Thank you for sitting through it! Hope you enjoyed!
Aug 20, 2022, 5:17 PM
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Vixen and Gray live in a world where everyone has a literal monster inside of them! That monster can devour the humans negative emotions, to the point where they can kill the human! But... That is very rare. Although, what us not rare, is the thanks we all feel for people who helped us through this difficult journey. SO! I would like to thank my mom for helping me with voice acting, and consulting with me on the story. My mom was an amazing help and an infinite amount of words would not be enough to thank her! Plus, my Aunt Jan was a big help as well- as she stepped in at the last minute to voice Principal Ruby- so I thank her! Without their amazing help I would not have been able to pull this off! So... Thank you Aunt Jan and mom! Now, please enjoy!!!!
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