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Michael (2 likes, 1 helpful)
This is a lovely, sweet, and fun story. Mutton is an amazing character, and her love and belief in her owner is heartbreaking. Mutton's design and being a Frankenstein dog are two fantastic elements. The twist of Mutton wanting to be on the talent show is awesome. I really like how her relationship blossoms with Mary. I really appreciate how you use the fantastic (Frankenstein dog) with some really solid thematic elements (being abandoned, finding a new home, Mary's anxiety about losing Mutton). Watching this I got hit with a bunch of emotions, and Mutton's innocence is both endearing and heartbreaking. The argument between Mutton and Mary is so sad and effective because of your dialogue. You do a great job of letting Mutton hit a very low point and creating maximum drama.
This is a solid reel, but there are a few things that were unclear, but these are easy fixes. First, it is unclear who Mutton is in the beginning, and because of this the story isn't able to hook us immediately. Filling in a few more details about who Mutton is, like her unflinching loyalty and innocence, before she is dropped off can nicely fix this. Your reel is nicely detailed and you hit all the big and small beats well, but it can still use some trimming. I love how thorough your reel is, but focusing on Mary and Mutton's emotional arcs more might be a good way to tighten this up, especially in the beginning. Also, act two can develop Mutton's inner struggles a bit more clearly. When Mutton and Mary have their fight, it is so sad, but because things run so smooth earlier on, perhaps there can be some more foreshadowing earlier on. This is also an easy fix and it is clear what you are doing, so throughout rewrites it is certain that Mutton's conflicts will be smoothed out.
This is a complete story, it is original, beautiful, and has an amazing message. You are able to create humor and heartbreak easily, and the story is so warm and kind. I am so glad I found your reel.
Aug 22, 2022, 7:08 PM
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will provide one soonMuttons is a Franken-stiened dog left in the woods. Loyally They wait for their owner to return but it never happens. Mary is a girl who is Hard to hear. She encounters Muttons, and tries to help them return home. Muttons and Mary watch a show at Mary's house where Muttons is excited and suggests that they audition for the show so his owner will be able to see them. As they train, Muttons and Mary become closer and Mary begins to second guess letting Muttons go. When they arrive at the competition Muttons is immediately singled out by those around them. Feeling insecure Mary encourages them. The competition gets jealous when Muttons competes well and complaints are made. Forcing Mary and Muttons to do a physical. They are disqualified. Mary consoles Muttons . Muton's blames themselves, and Mary tries to uplift them. Mary offers to adopt Muttons but is rejected. They get into a fight, and Muttons bites Mary. Mutttons is scared away, and runs off getting lost. Mary looks for muttons to no avail. Muttons wakes up in a park and is hungry. They smell food and try to ask for it but campers are afraid of them. sadden they begins to smell the scent of his old owner. They find the home abandon. Meanwhile Mary is looking for muttons. They can hear the signal on mutton's collar get better and follows it. Muttons sad, is startled by a knock. thinking it is their master they wait eagerly. Mary Bursts through the door, and Mary and Muttons embrace and apologize to each other. Muttons sees the love that Mary has the for and doesn't feel alone. A few days later Muttons is officially adopted by Mary. They are playing fetch at a local dog park where another dog steals the ball. the dog has a scar on their face, and wants to play. Muttons sees this and plays. Mary is happy that muttons is adjusting well. the end
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